tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post6504764512654613..comments2024-01-26T08:04:08.517-05:00Comments on The Public Query Slushpile: Query- Story for a Shipwright (Revision 2)Rick Daleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05173516899130463413noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-66956720406565617242009-05-20T07:37:44.797-04:002009-05-20T07:37:44.797-04:00After reading many other posts, both here and on s...After reading many other posts, both here and on sited links, I feel as though my first sentence lacks a real hook. I’ve been rethinking—okay, obsessing over—it, and some of my description, and just so I’ll sleep better tonight, I have to post another revision. Rick, thanks for indulging me.J.B. Chicoinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06894797553204276281noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-71160623486751654222009-05-18T08:05:00.000-04:002009-05-18T08:05:00.000-04:00Scott,
I've seen that done on several other querie...Scott,<br />I've seen that done on several other queries here, and now that you mention it, I rather like the idea. Thanks for taking the time--I appreciate it.J.B. Chicoinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06894797553204276281noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-58335103781830001812009-05-17T17:20:00.000-04:002009-05-17T17:20:00.000-04:00The only major change I would make would be to dro...The only major change I would make would be to drop your first paragraph to the end. I think you do a good job summing up the story. <br /><br />I kind of think of these query letters like news stories. As a repoter, I was trained to write in an "inverted pyramid" style. That just means getting the most important facts first and then filling in the details later.<br /><br />I think you want to hit the agent with the key elements of your story first, generally the key point of your story. Everything else can feed off of that.Scott Danielhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09744436601853807608noreply@blogger.com