tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post4363190849803731284..comments2024-01-26T08:04:08.517-05:00Comments on The Public Query Slushpile: QUERY - WORLD BOOK (Revised)Rick Daleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05173516899130463413noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-69931499503617194932011-03-02T20:52:42.772-05:002011-03-02T20:52:42.772-05:00Whichever is most likely to get more reviews.
Tha...Whichever is most likely to get more reviews.<br /><br />Thanks!Faracihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07060569590492957969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-87193081026067458352011-03-02T15:40:08.490-05:002011-03-02T15:40:08.490-05:00Would you like me to post this revision in a new p...Would you like me to post this revision in a new post?Rick Daleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05173516899130463413noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-11727486209866300352011-03-02T15:10:30.410-05:002011-03-02T15:10:30.410-05:00Another new version. I'm not sure if I should...Another new version. I'm not sure if I should base future revisions off of this style or the previous matter-of-fact plot description. Is this one more exciting to read?<br /><br />Dear Agent,<br /><br />Everyone obeys the World Book. Everyone in the Kingdoms of the Land, Air, and Sea. If you don’t, you get thrown to the magistrate. And if you break the High Laws, you’re killed. Seth doesn’t mind, for the most part. As long as you follow the rules you stay safe and well fed with your family. It’s hard to miss freedom when you’ve never had it. <br /><br />Kinessa doesn’t think so. She’s brave, rebellious, and angry with the World Book – everything Seth is not. She shows up in Seth’s backyard, claiming to have amnesia, but Seth is pretty sure she’s lying. Eventually, though, Kinessa’s crazy ideas about the World Book get him thinking. Why can’t he explore the woods and visit the beach? Why does he have to accept the World Book without questions? But when Kinessa changes into a sea serpent in front of him, Seth realizes that she has a broader plan then breaking a few rules.<br /><br />Kinessa says she wants to start a revolution in the King’s City. Seth is hesitant to back her plan, but he knows he can’t go back to his previous life. A few people start to listen to her ideas, but when the authorities catch up to them Seth must rely on his own intelligence and courage to save them all.<br /><br />WORLD BOOK is a completed 32,000 word fantasy for middle grade readers.Faracihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07060569590492957969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-71089307776832643712011-02-22T11:18:40.747-05:002011-02-22T11:18:40.747-05:00Yes, someone else dies. The father of one of the ...Yes, someone else dies. The father of one of the main characters, actually.Faracihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07060569590492957969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-37036268294032610462011-02-20T21:39:49.732-05:002011-02-20T21:39:49.732-05:00How is it a "deadly confrontation" if th...How is it a "deadly confrontation" if they escape with their lives? Does someone else die?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com