tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post8246426408010801980..comments2024-01-26T08:04:08.517-05:00Comments on The Public Query Slushpile: Query- EVERLASTING (Revision #1)Rick Daleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05173516899130463413noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-61023477663180794632009-04-16T16:59:00.000-04:002009-04-16T16:59:00.000-04:00Thanks, D. Ross, Appreciate the comments!Thanks, D. Ross, Appreciate the comments!Laranoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1588509537601105804.post-73048136730109271952009-04-16T16:27:00.000-04:002009-04-16T16:27:00.000-04:00Hello Me,
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Jeanne's 'aimlessness'-I...Hello Me, <br /><br />Paragraph #2:<br />Jeanne's 'aimlessness'-I think this might need a stronger word or phrase that ties in why she has not moved on to the land of the dead.<br /><br />Paragraph #3:<br />Jeanne’s initial eagerness to find resolution and fade-you might want to add 'to Everlasting' to remind where Jeanne is supposed to 'crossover'. <br /><br />This novel sounds very interesting, 'me'! As all say, take with a grain of salt, only YOU know your story, but I hope another set of eyes on the query will help. It has helped me!<br /><br />D. RossAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com