Feb 11, 2010

Query - Sienna

Dear Agent,

The need to protect her sister from their abusive father weighs heavily on 10-year-old Sienna’s mind. One night out of desperation, Sienna informs her mother that her father has been sexually abusing her. This assertion leads to the murder of her father by her mother. Covering up the murder as an accident, Sienna’s mother says it is Sienna’s fault and orders her to leave and never return. Sienna’s grandmother takes her in.

Now, 15 years later, Sienna’s life appears to be full. There’s only one thing lacking and that is love. And love is one thing that she does not trust.

One day Sienna’s best friend and next door neighbor, Chantal, wins tickets to a rock concert. Sienna is not really interested in going, but Chantal will not take no for an answer.

David Black is a rock star. He is secretly married to a woman he does not love, and he becomes captivated with Sienna when he sees her sitting in the front row at one of his concerts. He invites her back stage to meet him.

Eventually, Sienna and David fall in love. When David asks Sienna to accompany him on the last leg of his concert tour, she agrees. Unfortunately, David fails to mention his married state to Sienna and she finds out.

She quickly heads for home on a Greyhound bus, more convinced than ever that love has nothing but hurt for her.

When she gets home she discovers that her sister, whom she has not seen or spoken to in 15 years, has left a phone message that their mother has died.

Sienna must now travel back to the home where the horror of her childhood was played out and to the sister that she left behind.

What she doesn’t know is that David is right behind her and determined to win her back.

Sienna, a romance novella, is complete at 35000 words.


Query - The Butterfly Key - Revision 5

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Shortly after Christian Bryson promises to fulfill his wife’s dream of starting a family his Army Reserve unit deploys for war. In battle, Christian sustains a wound which renders him incapable of fathering children. Devastated, Christian agonizes over telling his wife Abigail about his infertility for fear of ruining her dreams of motherhood.

Christian blames his calamity on the so-called providence of God and wishes death would have taken him. Haunted by a promise he can no longer keep, and dreading Abigail’s reaction, Christian keeps silent about his impairment. What Christian doesn’t comprehend is Abigail will accept him with unconditional love no matter what albatross she's forced to bear.

When Abigail tearfully pleads for him to come home from the hospital, Christian refuses. In his heart he believes he is no longer the husband she deserves. God, however, believes otherwise and intervenes. He sends two special travelers—one alive, the other not—to help Christian allay the anguish within his soul. With the guidance and love of God’s sojourners, Christian realizes he needs to go home and apologize to Abigail.

Upon Christian's return to his wife he’s overcome with joy, for God has a plan in everything He does when He graces Christian with an unexpected gift.

THE BUTTERFLY KEY is a 72,000-word work of Christian fiction.

Thank you for your time and consideration.


Query - Descent into Darkness - Revision 1

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When Aiden’s ability to use the dangerous and forbidden art of Dark Magic spontaneously manifests during an intense argument with his fiancée, his dream to marry and start a family is torn asunder. Betrayed to the Church by the woman he loves and sentenced to a lifetime of imprisonment, Aiden finds salvation in the least likely of places: the Shadow, the dreaded evil army that seeks to bring chaos and destruction to the land.

But in order to achieve his revenge, Aiden has to face challenges beyond just acquiring the pieces of the key that will free the Shadow Lord from Hell. His ex-fiancée joins the forces of the very Church he is fighting against, and a heated rivalry soon forms between Aiden and the ruthless commander of the Shadow himself, both for the power they both desire—and for love.

DESCENT INTO DARKNESS is a 129,500 word work of fantasy. It is the first in a series of two books, the second of which is currently in progress. Thank you for your consideration.